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A Dreary Travel by ~haku277:iconhaku277:



Lifeless.
The tower stood,
By no bounds.
With its words,
The words it spoke,
It broke all meaning.

Thus, the knight rode.
Steadily he rode,
And looked toward it,
That crooked tower that stood.

There he saw,
A man of higher stature,
The warden of knowledge.
Kind he was,
Unlike those he had crossed before.
"At the bottom,
The very bottom of this very tower"
Spoke the warden with fatality.

And so, the knight rode.
Steadily he rode,
And looked toward it,
The staircase to humanity.

There he saw,
An ordinary Blade.
Which bore a symbol:
"TO BE" is what it read.

The knight picked up his lance,
A gleaming lance of flame and death.
Out rode the knight,
With his lance in one,
And his Blade in the other.

There he saw,
A woman of desire,
The birth of pulchritude in his eyes.
Lucky as he was,
For she, too had been kind.
She stood and awarded him
With an iron Rosary
Marked with the words:
"TOGETHER"

She began to walk in a distance,
At last sought for the warden.
Once together, embraced
And collapsed, them both.

The knight unmantled his horse.
And dropped his lance,
As his steed fell shortly after.
He stripped his armor,
And left his lance of strength.

And so, the knight began to walk.
Dreary and lifeless as he did.
Looking up, his eyes met hers.
She smiled, aiding his salvation.
The knight lost in despair,
Began the words, "Thank You"
Presenting her a Rosary.

In an instance of panic,
A black blizzard of dunes dusted.
And his maiden lost.


From walking and walking,
The knight saw a weary traveler,
Which he presented his blade.
The traveler accepted,
Leaving the knight.

The knight was lesser now,
Beginning to see nothing,
Yet, strived to live.

Again, a horse in the distance,
Followed by a fair maiden.
He embraced her,
Dreary he was, but happy
And collapsed, them both.
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Author's Comments

Just some random writing. I'd like to know what everyone thinks, if it's not too much to ask.
Thank you.

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:iconstarflux:
Wow...its gonna take me a moment to digest it all in my mind!

There is so much

The first part seemed to me like persevering toward a very important goal with an amount of diligence that is heroic. Yet it seems to suddenly change as if to show how mortal things in our lives are. But then the end part seems to say that not all is in vain when they are reunited. I mean there is probably pages of interpretation that could be drawn from it but it boggles my mind. I have to say I haven't read alot of your work recently and now I remember what I have been missing.

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random? oh...oh well, I still thinks its freaking awesome... and I don't think I have ever typed freaking so that just shows how awesome it is! :D

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:iconblackapricot:
Its sooooooooooooooooooooo pretty!!!! (I know, not very technical am I??)

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:iconwingsxreborn:
ooh i like it nooo scratch that ,i love it ^^:w00t!: that is a :+favlove: i really wish i could produce an amazing piece like you can ,erm.. well i write songs mm... maybe i should post them sometime ??? i really love it , its amazing ^^ your work is always incredible!!^^ :glomp:
:iconmegamialchemist:
wow love that <33 so much imgerary yet with out too much description upon how each characted looked liked but let the reader see how they are inside in a way... i'm not making any sense ._.;; but anyways great job :] <3

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:iconhaku277:
Oh my. Thank you very much for your praise considering that I haven't seen or heard from you in a long while. A bit busy, are we?

Anyway, although you say that in the end it is not in vain being reunited, I still believe that it's a shame that their seemingly wanted love were parted for so long.
I'm not sure, actually. I wrote this from having an inspiration last for a week or so, but never being or having the chance to write it down. I'm not sure who to interpret it, and so I'm asking my dA friends to help me. =/

Well, thank you for your critism. I will keep it in mind when I decide to look deep for the meaning and purpose why I have written this.

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:iconhaku277:
Haha, thank you very much for your comment.
What did you think was pretty about it?

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The difference between rain and my tear drops is the reason they fall.
:iconhaku277:
Oh, my work isn't that great. I'm sure you can write something great that people will appreciate, as well. :aww:
Anyway, thank you very much for your appreciation and your favorite. :hug:

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The difference between rain and my tear drops is the reason they fall.
:iconhaku277:
Hehe, you make perfect sense, although the concept itself is a bit confusing. I guess it's fun to try and introduce characters that people can directly understand and feel as if they knew them.
Thank you very much for your praise and compliments. :)

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The difference between rain and my tear drops is the reason they fall.
:iconblackapricot:
the words you use. dreary, pulchritude, those words that not everyone else would think to use. Your vocabulary amazes me.

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"I should draw you.
Take you clothes off."

-Xxaifaust

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